Focusing Sentences
Through Parallelism
Parallel structures include word or phrase
patterns that are similar. When ideas in a sentence or paragraph are
similar, you can reinforce these similarities in meaning through
creating parallel structures. Effective parallelism creates symmetry in
sentences and adds force to your writing; it emphasizes the likeness
between two or more ideas.
Correct Form for
Parallel Structures:
The first sentence below contains parallel
structures; the second does not.
We need tutors who are ambitious, who are
self-motivated, and who are dedicated.
We need tutors who are ambitious, motivate themselves, and exhibit
dedication.
In the first example, the words "who
are" are repeated three times, forcing the words
"ambitious," "self-motivated," and
"dedicated" to be alike. In the second example, "who
are" makes sense with "ambitious," but "are"
must be dropped for a reader to make sense of the following phrases in
the sentence. When sentences are truly parallel, and the verbs are used
exactly the same in each phrase, they do not need to be repeated.
Repeating the verbs becomes a question of style
and emphasis. Don't go too far with parallelism! Sentence 1 above could
also be stated, without too much repetition:
We need tutors who are ambitious,
self-motivated, and dedicated.
Parallelism to Clarify
Meaning:
Janet researches cell membranes and walls.
Is Janet a biologist, or a biologist with an
interest in interior design? This revision makes the meaning clear:
Janet researches cell membranes and cell walls.
Some Ways to Use Parallel
Structures With:
Items in a series:
As an artist, he drew, painted, and sculpted. I
came; I saw; I conquered. Eat, drink, and be merry.
Paired items:
The musicians began not only to sing, but also to
dance. Ask not what your country can do for you; ask what you can do for
your country. (John F. Kennedy)
Balanced Sentences:
White chickens lay white eggs, and brown chickens
lay brown eggs; so if white cows give white milk, do brown cows give
chocolate milk?
Lists and Outlines:
The research had three main goals: To discover the
cause of the disease. To propose a medicinal treatment. To document the
success of the treatment.
In Resumes:
Note: As you write or update your resume,
make sure all your listings are "parallel":
"Responsibilities included . . . ." as the beginning of each
description, or begin each description with verbs in the same tense:
"Researched," "Conducted," "Supervised,"
etc. |